As I hate what I've come up with so far, I have left it for a week.

And today, I returned to thinking about it.
The sudden realisation that leaving it for a week was a stupid idea made me think harder, as I now had time restraints.
This lead me to think that I must make everything simplier.


I will use silhouettes.
I will hang up a sheet, and do things behind it.
This also means I can voice dub it over later.
I feel that this well be great.

EDIT
I have gone back to my original idea. Hah.

Concept Paragraph (with edits.)

My idea is a sort of Film Noir-Indie film. That sounds pretentious. AWKWARD PEOPLE DOING NOIR THINGS

I've decided to do this in black and white. Mostly because black and white is cool, and film-noiry. It also means I have to think about how colour will look when I take it away, which I really like having to think about. I am thinking of naming the main character Bridge. It just seems to fit. I also feel that other than a voiceover, there will be no set dialogue. This means I can do it myself if I find no one else.

The idea behind it is a kind of flashback-is-it-real-is-a-dream deal. Someone will be seducing the rather awkward main character. Not even straight up seducing, just being in his house and being flirty, and he's noticing these small things like he's been in love with this person for a very long time. Noticing these little things.And they're just oblivious to how he feels.

I wish to invoke some kind of feelings in this. I'm not really sure what. Suspense?? A feeling of pity toward the character?? A feeling of "oh hey I've totally felt this about someone, and they don't even know I exist". Is that sympathy or empathy.

I wish the audience to be shocked by the twist that is the end of my opening scene. A little bit sad, and maybe a little bit hurt. I want it to be a personal experience. I want the audience to know that Bridge is in love with this person, and this person has no idea who he is. But also to know the Bridge isn't creepy, he's just fallen in love over a period of time.

This guy introduces himself as the narrator ("Hello, I am ____ and I will be your narrator for today"), breaking the fourth wall, and then introduces this other character, ("And this is god/goddess here is ____, the only person to ever make me stop and turn") and then he describes them and what they are doing during last time he saw them/ first time he got close to them. It then jumps to him looking at them, dead.

EDIT: I have more or less gone with a totally different idea. It now follows this guy, who hates everything, and knows where the corpse of a girl is. If it was longer, it would deal with the fact that this girl has died and no one really cares, even though she was one of the most popular people in the small town. Horror-noir film. It keeps the black and white aspect, and the opening line.

It will still be a voice over, but instead of an awkwardyoung man being seduced, it will be a strange child who does not enjoy where he is. In fact, he hates it. He openly hates it.

I almost want the audience to be alienated from the character, and think that he is the killer, just because he is cynical and cold towards everything. He'd mention how someone in his family died mysteriously and hint that he was involved, but really it was liver cancer or something.

I want the audience to want to see more. Having grabbed their attention, I want them to ask questions. Questions are good.